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I like how you immediately distance this from the all too often clich`ed teen angst poem. Not to discount what anyone is going through but it seems like that is ...

Okay, so I hope you take this constructively. These are just my observations and obviously subjective and all that and everything else. First, your words flow quite well for the ...

See this is more about what I'm talking about (refer to my review of your poem "Invisible") "Your sound" - this is pleasantly ambiguous (completely earnest). People often think ambiguity ...

I like your first six lines. It really sets up the viewpoint of someone reflecting cynically. It builds at just the right pace. I could almost hear the wry self-deprecation. ...

Hello Audy, So I really like this. I only have a few suggestions/questions. I won't say much because there's very little here that I don't like. Instead of "Those Siberian ...

Hello, I really like some of your wording here. "Do you feel the pain sinking me in?" "... sinking me in" really adds some depth. It lets the reader relate ...

I really like the rhythm here though I don't know if you were really focusing on that so if this isn't relative to where you want to go with this, ...

(I'm an amateur, hence the blank comment) Wait, just what is this about exactly? . . . please write a poem about me :) Ha just playing but I like ...

So I like just about all of this and just about all of this feels original and unique. The only thing I don't like as much is the line "our ...

Rhyme when you want. And it looks like you have. I like this. It seems like so many people try to write such epic poems, like they sat down with ...

As a review, I hope this helps. Maybe it can save a poem. I would leave it like it is. Age, gender, insight on the situation, etc. would only distract. ...

This is quite the strong statement. Are you speaking from personal experience? I don't mean to pry (oh irony). Some might find it offensive but what good is it if ...

I really like this. It fits so perfectly with a memory of a loved one who was so overbearing, who had to control every outcome. It tore him apart. He ...

This is really good, as I'm sure you don't need anyone to tell you.Your use of scene and pacing is as good as I've ever read. The fact that you ...