piepiemann22

I'm not judging her. I don't do that. I simply stated how I felt. If I hurt anyone in any way, I'm sorry.

I like this poem, though it could use some work. Reread it to yourself and find more line breaks. You also need puncuation. Add thouse things and I'll give a ...

this truly is pointless. I know that was your intent, but please write with a meaning to. It isn't a bad poem. Just please keep that in mind.

Your begining grabs me alittle, but it isn't enough. I think you should write more before posting.

you may be right. I'll keep that in mind.

First, add punctuation it makes it flow and sound better. It isn't anything new. There are a lot of poems like this.

This poem does not seem new. Poems about love are always done, but that doesn't matter. The fact you wished to write it is all. The flow was good, but ...

It is very simple and not to new. The sructure does need work, but I'm sure you can do it. Don't worry, we all start somewhere. Keep trying.

I is a very simple poem. Not to much meaning or feeling, but I like it all the same.

First of all add punctuation. It will make it sound better. You also type to fast. yoru is spelled your. even I knew that. The last line also seemed to ...

I like it. the only thing is you could have ended the chapter a little better in my oppinion. Other then that, keep going.

Sure

I like it as a short story, but why did you put it in POETRY?

Thank you for your help. I have to edmit this isin't my best poem. I'll try again soon.

First of all and add period, comas, things like that, then I will return