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I agree with Kat about the emotion, it is amazing in this piece. Good job on that. And the full stops were sort of odd. I don't think I've ever ...

Hi Rose. The things I saw in the poem was that it was a little hard to read. When the line breaks are like that it is a little strange ...

Hi Timmy, I'm Sarah :). First off I saw some missing commas. Five bikers , side by side, Ride out into the night. Engines revving , helmets off, Ready for ...

Hi Lite. I told you I'd review something if you posted it. And you are my 100th review! Yay! Haha now for the review. I thought this was a good ...

This was a very good poem, like Grin said the topic was handled very well. But I agree with Dreamer. If you read back through and focus a little more ...

Wow Howler I agree with the others that this was very unique. I loved how you incorporated his name into another person (his daughter's) life. This lesson that some one ...

Hi Leza! I'm going to rearrange it like I told you I would just so it will flow a little better, plus it will be a little easier to read. ...

Hello, very creepy poem :). But that's okay I like creepy. A heap of broken bones lay there , The caved in skulls, the marrow s of the ribs split ...

Now I see what it is! It's a tiger a white one, A mother with her new born son. A stick cracked her ears pricked, Okay this is one thing ...

I agree with the other posts this could have had so much more emotion. I felt like you were just telling us what happened instead of describing what was going ...

Hi Passion. This piece reminded me of "Everybody's Fool" by Evanescence, just thought I'd throw that in here since others have said it reminded them of something. I'm going to ...

Now I know why I don't write poetry. I am like Dreamer, looking too deep into the poem. I got confused.....And I will tell you where so you can tell ...

I agree with some of the previous posts you could really expand on this. Narrative poetry tells a story, which is what you are doing but it could be much ...

Okay, wow. I think Flemzo covered a lot of the punctuation. I agree with Flem 100%. You have to put end marks in poetry. Like Flem said on your other ...

I've watched you silently, Moving from one place to another. Letting fate dictate your route, If it is fate it wouldn't be dictated, it would just happen Every second of ...