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Re: secrets
Hi pencilgirl, welcome to YWS I'm peanut! I think Yuri hit on a lot of important points. And I agree that this isn't really a short story. I read it ...
Jun 20, 2010 -
Re: Lost&Found: Chapter 4: Christmas Lights
Tehe me again. :) (which wasn’t completely untrue. That way if I was seen with Henri, my alibi would still stand. You are missing a set of parenthesis. I'm not ...
Jun 10, 2010 -
Re: Lost&Found: Chapter 3: Decorations
I know you said there was plot holes and such in this chapter but I took a look at it anyway. I hope the holes have something to do with ...
Jun 10, 2010 -
Re: Lost+Found: Chapter 2: Housebreaking
Hello again :) Unfortunately I don't have as much to say about this chapter. I loved it from the start and I love your narrator so much. He's insanely easy ...
Jun 10, 2010 -
Re: Chapter 1: When Love Comes Knocking
Alrighty here I go. I'm going to try and help. To anyone else it was a setting, or a place with a settled ambience, but to me it was… something ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Reality
Hi Sage, welcome to YWS! I'm peanut and I'm gonna try to help with this. If she had been looking, she would have noticed it. A hazy shape, shimmering in ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Those Moments
Emely! Hello again :) I know you are new to YWS and we sorta have this rule. It's a ratio so that everything is kept in balance. I'm not one ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Broken Fairytale
Hi Emely welcome to YWS! I'm gonna be reviewing your poem today :) I can't believe W h ere my thoughts are with you . I know I cant ever ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: The Breeze
Hi kitro. I thought this was very creative. I liked that you were talking about grass the whole time but your descriptions were so personified that the reader didn't know ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Ledi
You weren't that bad. Trust me I was way worse when I started writing poems. Ledi is a leprechaun He works from night to dawn He leaves in the morning ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Heirs to the Light excerpt
Hi Stori. I'm not really sure what to make of this. It's very short and I'm pretty sure it's apart of something bigger. I'm going to try to review this ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Just Like Last Time
Hey, Kaywiia I'm going to hit on something besides the emotion of this piece. My friend asks me. The heat from the school bus is messing with my brain, and ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Planes
Hi Lilicia, I'm peanut :) and I'm going to try to help out with this. She looked out of her window, observing the way the plane flew across the sky ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Mercy (An original by Sherie.)
I only have time to review about half of this but I hope it'll help. I'm going to try to get to the rest of it tomorrow. My mom who ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: >Untitled<
Hi Lucy, welcome to YWS! I'm peanut. This may be a little rusty since I haven't reviewed in a while but I'm going to try and help. Three days passed ...
Jun 8, 2010
