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Whoa. Wait a second, *rereads*, that was very different! Alright, this is very strange. I like it though. After all, who writes about inanimate objects very often? That was wonderful ...

This did seem more like it should've been a short story than a poem. I did enjoy it and the word "scandalous" was very powerful. The rhythm is off a ...

Very interesting, it flows wonderfully though the ending isn't as strong as I would want it to be. I agree with Alzora. It seems like it should continue. I would ...

I loved the imagery. That's the first thing that caught me. I like how you expressed the emotions through imagery and it makes me intrigued to read your story. Heehee ...

I liked it a lot. It really strung a chord with me, even if I am not a Christian. We all should be proud of our religion and be real ...

Dude. Dude. You did it. You just did it. You made my day. Descriptive, chilling, haunting, amazing. Love it okay? Forget about dislike for a second because this is awesome. ...

It was interesting and quite haunting. Actually I am reading it again because I love it so much. (Good job, that's a real compliment.) Basically I'd describe the girl more ...

Its...wow. The description is so intriguing. I love that in this poem. I read Harry Potter and I know who MacNair is, but I don't think others would. Still I ...

I curse you! You are one of the people who wrote something that made me cry. I guess it's because I am close to someone who does this stuff, and ...

As weird as it sounds, I like this style. It's more direct and less formal, which is really interesting to read. I don't agree with gowtham, it IS a poem. ...

Few grammar mistakes but it was very good. I would like to see you build on this and make the idea less subtle. Maybe you should build on the imagery. ...

It's interesting, this event. I liked the flow of it, but you don't need the commas everywhere! It drove me nuts! Commas don't need to go at the end of ...

Wow. Just wow. It's...wow. Okay, besides wow, it's intriguing. Ha! I knew you were messed up! I like it. I like this drabbling. It's cool. I like the irony. I ...

I agree with chibi. A few lengthened lines would make the poem flow a lot better, and it is complain. I also think you should add a period at the ...

First off, I love Mercutio and Benevolio. Heehee that was so awesome. Ben and Merc were my favorite characters in the original play. My suggestion would be to put the ...