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The lines are a bit too short and concise. Maybe you should fit some more metaphors in it, like the beginning one. Like maybe compare your feelings to a ship ...

I feel that, in that situation, you didn't give it very much justice. The last stanza was just, ech. I didn't feel the heartbreak, or the revenge, or the reason ...

So this wasn't half bad. Not bad at all actually. The rhythm and rhyme was very nice. I would get rid of the "dear" because when I read it, it ...

It was...alright I suppose. I didn't feel at all in the poem. I saw what you were describing, but it just isn't my type of peom I suppose. Your imagery ...

This may be a lame review but oh well I am giving it a shot. I detected bitterness in this (well no dip, Sherlock) and that is what made me ...

I love the anger in this. It is so "in-your-face" about it. The thing that off-set (is that a word?) it to me was the comparison of the Christian's dull ...

Haha, it's quite ironic actually. Though I am slightly offended because my mam works on aeroplanes and my dad is in construction and theyre sending me to a private school. ...

The imagery in this was wonderful! I liked the flow and it made me think of a romantic setting. I think you should really expand on it and tell how ...

I liked it! It was very artistic. I like the last part, come stand with me at the edge of despair, and we shall skip stones against life. I don't ...

This is very beautiful. I didn't find anything wrong with it. It connected with me and reminded me of my Papa. Readers can definitely connect with this. A title? A ...

I didn't like it. It was...kind of...blah. There wasn't any emotions in it. I don't feel the love, I just felt the teenage obsession to be with a boy. I ...

Well this would be a great romantic story. I would make the entries longer and definitely show the girl's true feelings. Make sure to be realistic and include what a ...

Okay it was very beautiful and touching. For a 1000 word competition, it was very good. I didn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes, so I'll skip that. I think ...

It was pretty fast paced, but in this chapter it worked well. I didn't find many things wrong with this, except Guinivere annoys me to no end. She reminds of ...

1.) Are you out of your mind? Yes! I want to know more. I want to know more now!! 2.) I love the description. It wasn't too much or too ...