An Education Worth Paying For

by fhwdf

Published January 9, 2011

I haven't posted in ages and ages, but for the past couple of months I've basically been writing reams of freeform poetry, none of which I really feel confident enough to have ripped apart online... So anyway, here's my ballad-style poem about private schools and wouldn't-it-be-funny-if-they-were-training-them-all-to-be-construction-workers-instead-of-businessmen.

High-flying parents like to flaunt
Construction-worker kids
And so they start their aeroplane parts
To be just like their dads.

The little girl with eyes like soup
Dreams big. She says, “I hope
That I’ll become as good as Mum
At welding bits of pipe.”

The air is thick: it clogs your lungs,
It swarms with heavy dust.
The leaden heat glows red. It beats
Their throats, now shrunk with thirst.

The teachers like to boost morale:
“Why, Maisie,” they remark,
“You’ve quite a knack: your welding lacks
Inventiveness. Good work!”

The boy who’d rather read a book
Cocoons himself into a knot
With nose to knee, he finds that he
Can only smell inadequacy.

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fhwdf
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fhwdf commented Comment · Jan 10, 2011

Please don't be offended - all I mean is that it would be a lot more interesting if all the really posh schools trained children to be construction workers rather than businessmen! I'm glad you like it :D

paperbackheart wrote a review Review · Jan 9, 2011

Haha, it's quite ironic actually. Though I am slightly offended because my mam works on aeroplanes and my dad is in construction and theyre sending me to a private school. So, sadly I connected to it.

It was funny and a very great straight forward poem. :)

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Kafkaescence
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Kafkaescence commented Comment · Jan 9, 2011

This is a great poem. It is straightforward, utilitarian with its words, with just the right amount of metaphor sprinkled on top. Good job.

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ehte92
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ehte92 wrote a review Review · Jan 9, 2011

This is a very good piece...
A very original and different type of idea....
I must say one thing that it isn't necessary to start each line with a capital even if it is a continuation of the previous line....
Keep it in smalls it helps the reader to figure it out....
Other than that it was an enjoyable one...
Keep up the good work... :)
PM me for anything... :D



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