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Thoughts go in and out of my head looking up into the sky seeing my reflection in the window. Tears fill my eyes but do you even know. Shouldn't this ...

Truthfully Cicero, I didn't like this at all. It makes little sense and as he^ said, if you're going to write about "me me me", you need to give us ...

First off, let me say that this is a beautiful piece. But... When you say "He picks up a yellow crayon...", do you mean the teacher or a student? It's ...

MORE When he reached it, he got on is knees and peered in though one of the slats. Inside, were a multitude of guns. Mostly machine guns and pistols. When ...

“Number, please.” The lunch lady who Cassie could care less what her name is. You forgot "said" here. You did this in a few other places too. Y ou desperately ...

This sounds like it's going to be a great story. A bit of spelling errors, but very nice. I'm not positive of this, so check it before you do anything, ...

Wow, shuddered reading this. It was creepy, but it was a good creepy. It was very good. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. I liked how you ...

First of all, put this through spell check. Never use the &sign, say "and". "To" should be "too" Capatalize "I" Now, I did not like this. It was not very ...

This shouldn't be in lyrics, should it? It doesn't sound like a poem, nor is it long enough to be a poem. Try to post thing, maybe, in other poetry. ...

Try not to flood the forums. This is pretty bad, I'm sorry to say. Bad grammar, bad puncuation, makes no sense, and is poorly written. It makes no sense, it ...

Welcome to TYWS! I LOVED the narrator into thingy. It made me laugh. I don't really have a lot of time to critique, but I enjoyed reading this. Although, I ...

Please come Back I'm sorry I am sorry I know this is followed by what they are sorry about, but saying it twice seems very strange. Also, your vocabulary is ...

I found this poem more pleasing to read than the others, but it still lacks that special feeling. It seems like you wrote this just to write it, not because ...

I trutsully don't like this. I found little structure to it and it rhymed at times, but did not at others. It was kinda confusing. and take our families away ...

I liked this one. I usually don't read from the fantasy fiction section, but this caught my eye. There may be a few things you want to change, but I ...