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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Writers

    Make no mistake when you attempt to Gouge out our tongues For each one is a Thousand tongues of fire. So we shall summon the scorch of the Hyena of ...

    Oct 9, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Lipstick on His Collar

    This was better than I thought it would be, a lot better. I like that the theme was realization instead of jealousy and paranoia. Sometimes, the realization that someone has ...

    Sep 13, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets (Twitterized)

    This is great, it totally made my day. I love how cocky Harry is, and how the posts are in chronological order, it's a nice touch. My favorite post has ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Who would have thought that Jesus was a stalker?

    I like how, in the beginning of the story, Jesus actually does come off as creepy. I think this was a really creative story. I just have one nitpicky thing ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: deleted

    This has a really great message and I think this problem needs to be addressed more. That being said, I have to agree with the reviewers above and the changes ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hell's Rollercoaster

    This is really creative and funny, very entertaining. I like how direct it is, how it addresses the reader. The concept is also really unique, I've actually never seen a ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Betrayals

    Normally, I don't like things that are overly wordy, but I really liked this. The first stanza is especially good, I like that it uses humor to sort of lighten ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Tolerance

    This is pretty good, I like how it is written. It's very relatable, I'm pretty sure at one point or another, someone has had the idea of tolerance forced upon ...

    Jul 31, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: You died, tonight.

    Good poem, excellent twist. I can honestly say I did not see that one coming, even if I may have felt the same way about my Internet connection before. Onto ...

    Jan 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: We All Struggle To Breathe Sometimes

    It was a good poem, but a few times, I felt it was a little petty. Also, it couldn't really hurt to tone down the hypocrisy, just a little. I ...

    Aug 25, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: just random romantic stuff...kinda like a fictional diary.

    I really like this. I like how the narrator brings up the chemo casually, like her disease isn't what defines her, but just something she lives with. If that's what ...

    Aug 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: With Lobe;

    I really like this poem, it has a really unique style to it that I haven't seen much. It's really interesting, and reads more like a story than a poem, ...

    Jun 29, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Neverending Battle

    I agree the the posts above, the poem should be a little more descriptive. Less sentence fragments in the poem would be nice, in my opinion. Overall, it's pretty good, ...

    Jun 1, 2010


Tell me, what is it you plan to do / with your one wild and precious life?
— Mary Oliver