Tolerance

Hellouu! Demoness here to give you a review!

This is a good one, it's got a great flow and is both easy to read and relate to. I think you have a great idea but that it could be improved. For one, you use puntuation on only some of your stanzas while you skip it one others - stick to one way of writing and I personally prefer the ones WITH dots and commas Also, I think if you made your stanzas more alive, used more descriptions and imagery the poem would become more alive and the message would be clearer. Overall I enjoyed reading this and can really relate... the frustration when someone tells you to follow a certain path but then refuses to do so themselves... frustrating.

Therefore, this is my favorite stanza because by adding this one-person-against-the-crowd-dialouge you managed to get the message through completely. Loved it!

"And what about you,
Will you not tolerate me?"
They seem not to hear."

So.. with a few adjustments and even without them this was a great piece and I'm glad to have read it. Thank you!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

This is pretty good, I like how it is written. It's very relatable, I'm pretty sure at one point or another, someone has had the idea of tolerance forced upon them, and that kind of defies the definition of tolerance itself. But I don't think that tolerance doesn't exist, it's just something people shouldn't strive for.

In general, your piece was really nice - I've personally never been one for haikus, but it's honestly quite good in fact, even though I think it got a little repetitive. Towards the last two haikus, it felt like you were forcing yourself to write, even though you'd ran out of ideas. A lovely theme though, and one that I think everyone needs to identify with.

I liked that. I, personally, am not a poetry person by trade per say. I do novels more, but I saw your poem and thought I'd give critiquing it a go. First of all, I must say that, if I understand the meaning of your poem correctly, I agree one hundred percent. This poem really speaks to me and I know what you're going through in the thought process because I've been there myself. I must say the part where you said, '"And what about you, Will you not tolerate me?" They seem not to hear," are my thoughts on the subject exactly.
Now in the way of critique, this is very picky and it could be an artistic choice. In many of your stanzas, you don't put punctuation at the end of lines, even though voice and normal writing would dictate that punctuation should be used. For example, after the first line of you poem, despite not using quotes, it seems to be going into a dialogue of sorts. Usually a coma would precede the dialogue, therefore coming immediately following the words said. This, however, is entirely artistically up to you, that's the beauty of poetry.
Finally, even though I'm sure you don't want to change your poem in very many ways, I do have one question about the poem that I feel is unclear in the present writing, that you might choose to muse about adding a hinting to. I am unclear whom this poem is directed to. Is it directed to a friend, or a group? Humans in general, a political power? Or is it just a thought that didn't really have an intended target? I personally feel the total impact could be stronger, if tastefully added, a bit that hints to the voice behind the dialogue. Though, like I said, these revisions ideas are entirely up to you and your artistic thoughts on matter.
That's all I have to say, but to end on a high note, that was one of the better poems I've read. This applies very thoroughly to our society today, and I feel like it is an important factor in what every one is feeling. Overall, I loved the piece, keep writing such inspiring works.