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Re: And I Can't Utter A Single Word, Imagine Do I feel...?
This poem is simplistic and I enjoy the message you're trying to send with it. You are attempting to place others into your shoes. Personally I think the photographs take ...
Jul 20, 2015 -
Re: Chrysanthemums
First may I say I very much enjoyed this poem. The use of an extended metaphor for the chrysanthemum seeds and death is rather clever and draws in the readers ...
May 18, 2015 -
Re: Stability
I like the repetition you used here, with the repeated "I hate you." It gives the song a more bitter tone, as if the person you're directing it at is ...
Apr 18, 2015 -
Re: The Hammer in my Head
This poem is a bit confusing and contradictory, as I read it I feel the pain in the beginning, and in the end the joy for having the pain. As ...
Mar 3, 2015 -
Re: Survivors
Hi there, Okay, I really like the way this is written even if I don't like the way some of it was done. I really liked the use of dictionary ...
Feb 28, 2015 -
Re: Clocks
Hi there, I'm gonna try and review this for you. First don't let anyone ever tell you your poem is too short, there is no such thing. A poem is ...
Feb 27, 2015 -
Re: I Know There Is One
Hi there, Okay, first, I'm not good at reviews and I'll just point out to you what I think you've done well and what could be changed. I am not ...
Feb 27, 2015 -
Re: Touching the Sky
First can I just say wow. This is a beautiful poem that took my breath away, its perfectly versed and amazingly written. I cannot help but think its perfect, there ...
Feb 26, 2015 -
Re: Depending Secrets
This is very well versed and written. I really enjoy the rhythm you've established and how the lines read. I think you could improve it a bit, first with some ...
Feb 24, 2015 -
Re: Brand new dress
Okay, first, this is not a poem, a poem is organized into stanzas or at least broken up. This is a paragraph. Second, its skips around so much you become ...
Feb 24, 2015 -
Re: Selkie
Might I first say that I enjoy this piece quite a bit. It's beautifully versed and the rhythm fits perfectly. The imagery you used is striking and detailed, creating vivid ...
Feb 23, 2015 -
Re: A very short short story
Honestly this is a poem, straight out. It's short and simple and to the point. It has a few issues I would like to address, first, the lack of grammar ...
Feb 23, 2015 -
Re: These Are Places
Hi there, Well I'll say this, you were quick and to the point. I like the picture you painted, with both good and bad. As well you created a good ...
Feb 22, 2015 -
Re: Revolution
Hi there, This poem is very captivating in its images and its meaning. It is arranged perfectly. The only thing I find issue with is the rhythm. For me I ...
Feb 22, 2015 -
Re: Behind A Mask Of Lies
Hi there, I find this piece to be quite beautiful and breathtaking in its simplicity. One line that struck a chord for me was, "A silent scream is being sung." ...
Feb 22, 2015
