Behind my cherry cheeked mask,
My lips are sewn together in a smile.
♢
A silent scream is being sung
By the shadows that loom behind me
Though nobody ever hears.
♢
My friends are knitted in my dreams;
And I mourn to never see them again.
♢
A lovely crimson rose
Withered by the sunlight.
Will they ever hear my agonizing screams?
♢
So many voices;
So many people;
So why do I feel alone?
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Happy Review day! I am here to review this AMAZING piece and oust it from the Green Room!
Firtst of all, EEEEPPPPIIIICCCC job! This is an exemplary example of the right way to write emotional and dark poetry. You kept it short, but still very memorable and moving. Everyone has felt like this at on time or another, like nothing will ever get better, and nobody can help. This poem really captures that well, my friend. (That doesn't know me and probably did not know of my existence until a minute ago) Any way, I could only find fault with the end line. It just doesn't seem to fit with the pure artistry of all the other parts. (Nitpick level: OVER NINE THOUSAAAND!!!!) Just maybe use a few more adjectives and you are home free. Thank you.
-Toady
Happy review day again!
Hello! Teddy here for a review.
This poem is kind of dark. (Reminds me of the poetry I used to write when I was younger.) I kind of relate to the subject. I always felt alone, even though I had friends, like I was an outsider just observing them.
This does a good job of describing how lonely people feel at times. The imagery of the rose was perfect.
The pacing is good, and I have no other remarks. Have an amazing day!
Hi there,
I find this piece to be quite beautiful and breathtaking in its simplicity. One line that struck a chord for me was, "A silent scream is being sung." Its complex and holds a lot of meaning. I have nothing bad or very critical to say about this poem. I think its amazing as it is.
Hello unconsoled! CHRISSY321 here with a quick review!
I think that this poem was deep, heart felt, and just full go meanings! One more thing I want to point out is that way it is formatted! I think it is so cute! The little diamonds, that now that I think about it look like little masks! Yay! Overall, this was reappy great! Keep writing! 
*Happy Review Day!*
This is short, so there is not mush to say, but that does not mean that it is not great! I love where you describe the things you do and example bing the crimson rose! That is a great thing to do, and makes a good poem a great one!
Man- sorry- meant to say NightOwl! So sorry, saw the pic and it looked like unconcealed! So sorry!
No big deal xD S'all good.
Yay! Happy Review day!
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