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I just noticed, in the second line the word hi should be written like: "Hi" as it is a quote of what you said. xx

I think this is good. You've used some good imagery, although I find the point of the poem a bit to clear for my likings, although thats only my oppinion.

awesome! no-one really writes poetry like this no more. they all write about people dying and breaking up with their boyfriend etc. i really like this!

i like it, its so unique. hope you eep writing! M!M! :D

Blushed in embarressment (did i spell it right?)

this is great i like!

i like it alot. nothing else to say. someoone else noticed unctuation errors but i wouldnt really know about that so yeah. good. keep it up.

i like! mabye you could add a bit more detail as its so short

The first stanza wasn't really so interesting in my oppinion but the rest- WONDERFUL! i like this. Mimi

that was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hope you keep posting!

I think you commented on some of my stuff so i'll coment on yours- This was awesome and so original and i like originality. (is that even a word? well ...

nice! this rocked even for a first draft. but keep at it and maybe change some words to better words.

this is sweet and i loved the 'seeing a void' bit. its just totally unique. i'd say something about commas and stuff like that but im not too good with ...

NICE! i really really like it. espesially the second stanza.

i like it, but in some places it sounds like you're trying tho force the rhyme, other than that i thought it was cool esp. the last stanza