Published March 12, 2008
There once was a girl who lived in a world
Where all her dreams came true
But she never guessed that when she dreamed of a guest
That you’d show up there too
So alone in her room on that fateful May night
Along you came, a knight
And made none of her dreams come true
Tripping and falling you came into being
In the world where dreams come true
But, never could you guess that you’d be a guest
In a world where dreams come true.
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This was very nicely written. I can definitely see this published somewhere or a beginning to a chapter in a novel. It wasn't overly long or too detailed and it kept me reading. Nice job!
Great Job. Simple, short, and to the point. Keep up the good work.
This was great! I could realy see this published.
awesome! no-one really writes poetry like this no more. they all write about people dying and breaking up with their boyfriend etc.
i really like this!