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This is a really interesting sequence of emotions. The ending was actually kind of sad for me. I didn't like that it was a new hand. What happened to the ...

Intriguing story. Is this going to be a utopia/dystopia story? Because that "Father" guy is sounding pretty sketch about now. Under typical circumstances, a teen who misspells their name would ...

I agree with Tyler. This poem is really self-conscious. I like the idea of making fun of writing poetry and trying to rhyme, but since you told us that you ...

I have to say I love this. Part 1: In the classical days, the days before slipstreams, they would simply put those people to death; this was a much more ...

This is really interesting. I like the haughtiness of the seagull and all the imagery. Punctuation. You have a lack of it. I think it takes away slightly from the ...

Reminded me a bit of The Alchemist by Paulo Coelho (probably because I just read it). I'd recommend it; it's a good book. Now on to your poem: I think ...

I really like your theme and what you're actually saying in this. But the way you're saying it kind of makes it hard to understand. Capitalization. Is there any rhyme ...

No crits? I really like this. All the images are really beautiful and I was really drawn in by the allusion of the title. I like the title's relationship to ...

Lauren, this IS a poem! And I think it's quite nice! I liked how it was a collection of flashes, and it didn't really make sense until I read the ...

I think this is really cool (despite the depressing subject...) Dear, you should cover your arms, your pain is showing. The scars are exposed to all and the crowd is ...

I have read this over many times. It's very interesting to me. You oscillate between your desolate feelings in one stanza and your possible choices in the next. There has ...

I like this. It's like a snippet of an experience and I want to know more about the characters. Is the speaker a boy or a girl? Is the "he" ...

Did you mean for this to sound like "This is Just to Say" by William Carlos Williams? The rhythm is very much like it and you use some of the ...

This is beautifully written, but I find it a bit hard to understand. After the first three lines (which, by the way, I find just perfect) the point-of-view changes from ...

Honestly, honestly, honestly. This is sooooo beautiful. I love how you turn Icarus into a love story. His wings of wax, Gilded gold and beautiful, but Cold to the touch ...