nevanoel

:D I love the format of this. It's nice. It makes me happy. I am terrible at critiquing poetry, so I'm just going to leave it there. Neva

*my

I love this transformation. I can't describe it. It's just very lovely. Neva

*Feel

ALSO! I liked how the beginning read with such a abstract tone. It reads off almost like poetry. :)

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the feedback. :)

*leave

I just.... D'awww! This is so wonderful and cute and great. I didn't find much error, so I'll just lead it at that. D'awww!

Thanks! I'm definitely guilty of writing myself a common angst story every now and then.

Talk about intense. I loved the way you described her changing in the end. I could practically see it happening before me. And the way you concluded the story was ...

First off, I just want you to keep writing this because I want to see where you could take this and how you develop these characters. Call me crazy, but ...