Green Love, Green Pencils

hahaha, amazing!! Wow, this piece speaks of the optimistic, endearing side of love, as opposed to the dramatic more pessimistic side. I loved it. The flow was a bit out of the ordinary but it suited the almost childlike essence of the poem.
I adored the part about the winds of adventure blowing into the yarn of thick sweaters.
You were very concise at times, but I felt that that opened up other areas for greater detail.
My congratulations on an inspiring, truly wonderful piece!! I think I want to read it again

I really like the formatting of this piece. There are some things that are unclear though. You go through almost all of the poem revolving around green but then Root bear comes up? The poem is altogether interesting but I really wish I knew more about the subject. The color green is soothing, is that why you chose it? Altogether a good poem though!

I like the way that you formatted this but I think that you could have done a little bit better on the formatting I know it can be hard I understand. But If you where trying to make a colored pencil it didn't work I'm not seeing this pencil shape. I know if you work a little harder it could have looked like a colored pencil writhing if you wanted it too. Another thing is that it makes it a little confusing when you had the middle suddenly going back and forth and then slide down to onside It looks as if you just randomly hit the tab button ever so often... So please improve on that one. But otherwise with the words of it all Its rather interesting and moving with just the words. And then now all you would have to do is edit the format thats all. I'm not trying to be mean at all and I hope this doesn't make you angry or sad and if it does let it be the motivation to work harder on your next piece of work. -Peace V....V

I love the format of this. It's nice. It makes me happy.

I am terrible at critiquing poetry, so I'm just going to leave it there.

Neva