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A good poem, but there are small mistakes. The face is still the same But that person isn't familiar. There should be a comma after 'same' and always before any ...

Now this is quite depressing. I'm not usually into this kind of poetry, but this one certainly caught my eye. I think that the rhythm and rhyming throughout is good. ...

This is a lovely, sentimental poem with a beautiful rhythm and rhyme scheme. However, I am not too sure about this line If I knew what started it, Forgive it ...

Repulsion twists you all the while, From both the agony and my smile. I just love these two lines. The poem as a whole is very powerful. The repetition of ...

This is great, but I have just a few little suggestions. [/quote] Do you remember when the birds they You don’t need ‘they’ in this line. It’s grammatically incorrect. [/quote] ...

This is good, but it reads more like a song than a poem. Perhaps if you added more unique imagery and avoid using clichés then this piece would shape into ...

A beautiful poem. I disagree with the comment above. I don't think this is too short. The piece symbolises the length, or shortness, of those children's lives. I too think ...

Yes, this is good. I really like 'and my heart is too broken for you to mend.' However, the poem is too predictable. It gives too much away. I think ...

I really like this. If this is not your usual style of writing then don't worry! It's a lovely read. The imagery is brilliant and the lines fit together like ...

Now this is a very interesting poem. I love the structure; it looks like a descending mist. The structure alone sets the mood and the tone of the poem is ...

A wonderful piece of poetry. I can't quite believe that this is your first poem! I love the stretching structure of this poem and the rhyme scheme is brilliant. It's ...

'friend from enemy is impossible to tell.' How very true! I really like this poem. Its tone is spellbinding and the poem knows exactly where it's going. I have one ...

Yes, I like this and I agree with Brendan. This poem sounds almost like a song. I also agree with his point about rhythm. This poem seems to have no ...

I really like this, but I agree with the others. You have to be a little more careful when structuring your poem. Always check your punctuation (don't forget apostrophes) and ...