mystymizer

For those lost souls, Death is hardest on the forgotten . I would use a period here instead of a comma For those lost souls, Time of pain, and floods ...

I really thoroughly enjoyed this poem especially the small descriptions like "violet fire". It was perfect and the punctuation worked very well as did the structure for the words themselves. ...

I really liked this poem! Great rhyming and everything, all-in-all I have to say great job! One thing though, punctuation? I think this poem could do even ten times better ...

Not too fond of this piece ( but I hate saying I don't like pieces on here )! You should definitely think about more punctuation and adding a little rhythm ...

I'm not even sure if I'm allowed to comment on this [in fear of wrath!], ha. Lets just say you got your point across, you're through with reading depressing poems. ...

I touch his soft red rosy lips, Good alliteration, catches my attention! Trace the pattern with my finger tips, He grins at me and stokes my cheek, All handsome kind ...

I liked the idea behind this poem but the structure was a little too off when you didn't mean it so (it does seem). For one I think for this ...

Hmm...the concept and thought behind the poem was good. Dark, slightly morbid, I enjoyed it. My nit-picks are; -Punctuation should be added -A little more meter/syllable (I can't find the ...

I am absolutely enthralled by this piece. A perfect piece and example of narrative poetry, the rhyming scheme was done brilliantly! To add some style and change it up from ...

In this world of darkness, In this world of pain There is one who is always here for us; It is hatred. Simple punctuation like this allows the reader to ...

Never say "not my best work" or "not good", it makes people not interested in reading it! Have confidence in yourself and others will appreciate it more! ^^ A few ...

First off, I loved the poem...now lets take a little in depth look at it here and see what I can do (it won't be much, but it's something!). Winter ...

This poem is pretty to the point and although it uses imagery it feels like it is forced, bland imagery. This is not always a negative thing, some poems work ...

Never critsize your own work by saying it's "not good". How many people are going to want to comment on it when even the author thinks it's trash? Write because ...

Er...I liked the concept within itself (as in the story being told). I am just curious as to why you believed formatting and schemes were unnecessary? Punctuation and other grammar ...