moosiegirl

yea it was for class and thank you for your suggestions

lol thx everyone who cm luv ya all :) merry holidays

this story is ok but i think more descriptions and similies and metaphors and personification oh dear im babbling but u get the point ;)

i liked your song it sounded pretty cool did u record it urself?

do u write from experience or do u just make it up as u go?

probably a country song or some light pop

it is country and ill change that part that doesnt makes sense ty *moosie*

i like it but the sea is a methaphor right?

luv it michi oh and ur brie in my story so u might wanna check it out some time some of this thought is confuzing and i cant understand some ...

i write about people i know and my feelings. thats all there is to it.

I liked this it was amazing and I think alot of people can relate id love to hate it but i cant really think of any faults keep writing :)

i like how your songs like abstract in a good way but if you wanted to you could add more to the last few stanzas that would make it very ...

Hey darchoco, I liked your chorus the part about being stuck in his eyes do you mean like being pulled towards him? anyways the rest was pretty good. Your friend ...

i dont exactly agree with niteowl but i think that your song is pretty well done. If you add a little more that it seem a little more clear Go ...

I think it was very well writen. Is Jonathon a doctor? I was a little confused about that but otherwise i think your story was pretty well writen.