A little Coldplay/George Harrison-esque song. I was playing around around with some lyrics and effects and decided to record slow alternative track. I'm usually more of a classic rock guy, though.
Vocals and electric/acoustic guitars by me.
You can listen to it here (no downloading needed): http://www.zshare.net/audio/36533335531f29/
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i'm going far, today, I don't notice anyway
i'm in the stars, lookin' grey.
i drop down from mars, to say
i don't want this anyway,
i have to sing, on my own
and then i pick up my guitar, and then i sing
and i serenade myself.
each single note i play, will knock me off my feet,
so i fall and sing along.
i don't want to be here no more, i say.
i'd rather sit around all day.
there's nothing that you could say to make me go,
i'd rather sit here, and take it slow
i'll spin around for days, i know, i know nothing anymore
i'm in the stars, and so bored.
i resigned today, oh lord, i'm not involved no more no way.
i have to sing on my own.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay...so well before I start I do have to say that I do not normally dabble in lyrics because I'm not too experienced with them when it comes to reviewing but on behalf of the checklist challenge here I am, and I will try to give an idea of sort of the impressions I have of this piece here. So well let's see where this manages to take us.
I'm not really going to try and comment on how it sounds, because I really can't judge too well, but as far as the lyrics themselves are concerned there's an interesting sort of relaxed atmosphere leeching through here. Most of this song seems to be about sort of letting the world pass this person by as they relax in a corner.
I think it really fits that vibe well here. There's a minimal amount of imagery, making things seem almost like a void with just this person wondering within and I think all in all that makes this come together and work quite nicely to create that particular atmosphere in that particular way. Overall, its an interesting vibe that you've got here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
I thought the electric guitar was fine. There was one point where the background seemed either loud, or just slightly dissonant. I think it was in this verse:
I can't listen to it now to make sure, because I'm supposed to be doing homework.
i liked your song it sounded pretty cool
did u record it urself?
Thanks to all for the replies.
Did anyone think electric guitar was too overpowering. I've been listening to the track and it just seems so loud. But I'm a perfectionist...
Oh, goody, the link works now.
As I said before, I do like the lyrics. The song was pleasant to listen to; you could have gone a little farther with the melody. It sounded rather plain and tired to me. I completely admire those who can compose for their instruments, however, and set words to music. That's a skill.
*makes big eyes*
You are an awesome singer and your lyrics are really cool (but they'd be better if you capitalized your I's. >.<)
Fixed the link...hopefully.
http://www.zshare.net/audio/36533335531f29/
Beautiful and simple lyrics; I think I could give a better crit, but I want to hear the whole thing, and your link isn't leading me to the recording.
-Colleen