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  • Short Story » Narrative, Dramatic
    Re: Black and Gray

    Hello, tigeraye! So right off the bat I noticed that it's slightly bland. Instead of simply saying everything that's happened to him or what he's thinking, maybe try to just ...

    Oct 19, 2015

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Dramatic
    Re: Afraid

    Hello! First of all, this is insanely relatable to such an extent. I loved the concept of this, the emotion, the quotes, everything was really captivating. "“What you’re trying to ...

    Oct 19, 2015

  • Article / Essay » General, Realistic
    Re: American Citizen.

    Hello! I really liked this and I think a lot of people, including myself will take this into consideration. There's only one thing I noticed that I would change or ...

    Oct 19, 2015

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Dear Mother

    Hello! I really enjoyed this, very intriguing. The thing that stood out the most to me was the fact that you were able to capture some important details about her ...

    Oct 19, 2015


  • Hello, Stegosaurus! This made me laugh, great humor piece, loved it. Just a couple small errors. "He screamed causing a scene and ran out, nearly getting run over by a ...

    Oct 19, 2015

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Teen Fiction
    Re: My Old Self

    Hello! First thing: "It hit me like a semi going 80 mph down a highway." Make sure to spell out miles per hour instead of mph. "I’m weak, walls crumbled ...

    Oct 19, 2015

  • Short Story » Narrative, Horror
    Re: Df;/$-;

    Hello! Alright, hands down, one of the most creative things I've read. I absolutely love the idea of this. I'm not sure how to quote things, so I'll do my ...

    Oct 18, 2015

  • Short Story » Literature, Narrative
    Re: Rose Lip

    Hellooo racket! You had me a vignette. Absolutely adore these. Alright, next, wow. This is truly remarkable. It was just beautiful. Nothing has made me think so much in so ...

    Oct 18, 2015

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Literature
    Re: Light and darkness

    Hello! Thanks for the follow! Alright, first off, the concept of this is amazing. Such an interesting topic and what a captivating thing to write about?! So the first thing ...

    Oct 18, 2015


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