Number One: Birds. Some have speculated that birds are not the relatives of dinosaurs. Nate, on the other hand, feels that they are close relatives and stays inside on a sunny morning. Also, is afraid of pigeons (but that is a different matter).
Number Two: When he was a little chap, he played with dinosaurs on his floor on school nights. Throughout the whole seven day week, dinosaurs this and that. It was until sometime, playing with dinosaurs controlled his mind into thinking they were real. It was then that he threw these fake dinosaurs into the closet, never to be played with again.
Number Three: He once went to a live-action dinosaur museum, where they had the dinosaurs moved. He screamed causing a scene and ran out, nearly getting run over by a passing car.
Number Four: His mother would always drag him around places that involved dinosaurs. Museums, parks with giant T-rexes, and even got him a book with top five reasons to love dinosaurs. He became sick of these facts and threw them away in a nearby trashcan. Also, he had realistic nightmares about the T-rex chasing him.
Number Five: Finally, Jurassic Park Movies. Even though Nate knows these dinosaurs aren't real, he once tried watching them in 3D. Went to the bathroom soon as it started and stayed in there throughout the whole movie.
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Hello, Stegosaurus! It's Artemis28 here. Happy Review Day, my friend!
Let's begin! Okay, in number one, I'm kind of confused. Why does Nate stay inside on a sunny morning? You never expalin that, and I have a good guess, but I'm still not sure. Also, "Is afraid of pigeons" should be "Also, HE is afraid of pigeons." You know, a little extra word there.
I really like reason number two! It's really funny and random. I love it. XD
Some grammatical stuff, right here. "Where they had the dinosaurs moved" doesn't make sense. I think you meant, "where they had moving dinosaurs" or something like that. Also, "He screamed causing a scene" needs a comma between "screamed" and "causing."
"He once went to a live-action dinosaur museum, where they had the dinosaurs moved. He screamed causing a scene and ran out, nearly getting run over by a passing car."
In reason number four, I just lost it. Might be my favorite one. Actually, all of them are my favorite. But Top Five Reasons to Love Dinosaurs? You got me there.
Number Five is absolutely flawless. You don't need to change it at all.
Overall, this was extremely funny. I loved each reason, and even if I had some nitpicks, this was really good. Nice job and keep writing, Stegosaurus!
-Artemis28
only...five?????
dun dun dunnnnn
Hello, Stegosaurus!
This made me laugh, great humor piece, loved it. Just a couple small errors.
"He screamed causing a scene and ran out, nearly getting run over by a passing car."
First, there should be a comma in between screamed and causing.
"Went to the bathroom soon as it started and stayed in there throughout the whole movie."
I believe this a fragment, but I could be wrong.
Other than these two small errors, this was great. Very cute concept, humorous view into this kid's life. Not everyone has the talent to write funny pieces.
Keep Writing,
MK
Nate isn't a kid, he's the site creator and owner. This is some trend that's going around where people make lists of things he's scared of. *nods**and he's like 30-something, I forgot to add 'cause, like, he could still be the creator and owner if he was a kid. >.>Ohhhh!!!! Sorry, didn't know that.