Hi there captain! *salutes* Gymnast2801 reporting for a review!
First off, I have never thought of light and darkness the way you just described. I've actually never put much thought into it, except for the fact that I believe everyone is born pure and good. But I suppose I never thought that light and dark could be balanced in such a way. And you are right about one thing at least, there is a lot of dark in this world at the moment. However, I shouldn't plunge into a long speech about that or else we might be here all night.
As for the reviewing part on your grammar, word choice, extra, I'd say you did well. I didn't find anything misspelled and I think all your punctuations where spot on. My only thing is that towards the middle/early ending of this paragraph, I feel like you move too swiftly almost and you rush the topic and what you are trying to explain. It's okay to take your time. Also, I think you could break your paragraph up some because right now, it's just one large chunk of writing. However, I don't think it's 100% necessary to break it up, but you can if you feel like it or have extra time. Oh, and one last thing: add a period after 'The end' to finish off your paragraph.
Overall, nice job and a very interesting view of your topic (in a good way)! Keep of writing!
~ Gymnast2801 signing out.
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