mizz-iceberg

Thanks Guys! CK: I understand what you mean by trying to ease the transition but I was clueless as to how to do it. Vernon: I took out many 'I's ...

Hahahaha that was cute and refreshing! Very well written. Was this an actual assignment??

Great job once again. Sela pretty much pointed out everything that I noticed. -Waiting for the next chapter...

I agree with Stella and Kit, I would love to get to know your male character better. Other than that this was an extremely beautiful story. I love your style ...

I liked this! It made me smile. Even though this poem was dripping with Cliche-ness it was creative and had originality. I've never quite read anything like this. The idea ...

Well you already know what I first thought when I read this poem... :P But I see the rain drop perfectly now. It's not confusing at all. Great job!!

You've done it again, Bubble! You're an amazing poet!! This was very original and creative. I've been reading your poetry. They're all fantastic!!

Hehe!! Very cute story! Great descriptions and characterization!! I didn't really notice anything wrong with this. -Keep writing!!

Have you written more yet? I'm waiting. Let me know when you post more :D.

Haha I loved this. It was humor yet is was serious and to the point. I could really sense the 'polite' anger and how irritated the protagonist is. I also ...

ok I've changed it and added a Janice-Dan secene. Please crit again as harshly as you want!!

I think this would go well in poetry form ... no? Great descriptions and yes if you put it into poetry form, I think you would do quit well in ...

Oh thanks so much, you guys!! I'll make the changes right away and I'll add a part or rather a scene in the story that explains more in depth of ...

Ok I went over all this and edited all the mistakes. Now what do you guys think?

Thanks Pirhana! I agree with your review. The truth is, I'm not too good with punctuation when it come to poetry. As for the 'You and me' thing: I know ...