miyaviloves

Just so you know, I wont be posting this again for a while, I figure i need to work on the first bits again, so let me know if you ...

Oh i like this, its somewhat mysterious, i especially love this: Stumpy chimney, Marred with dark soot, But no smoke here cuts the air. Is thius about a house that ...

I can relate to this! Im not fond of haiku's in all hoensty but i liked this, it bought a smile to my face :D miyaviloves

p.s. dont beg for posts, it had only been ten minutes, give people time!

I liked this, it has a good flow and the rhyming was not out of place, well done i really like this! no wait i love it :D miyaviloves

Wow i really liked this, sort of reminded me of something that James Blunt might sing. Like Princess said, add punctuation and you will be onto something very very good ...

i agree with cadmium, from what i see you have posted many little 'poems' and expect replies as soon as you post them, your new and need to get established ...

hmmm.....are you posting this just to get replies? to be honest, it sounds like you have just puushed a few words together

Thanks to you all for taking your time to read through this! Claudette, you have pointed out things that i wasnt expecting people to figure out so quickly! He dosent ...

Again this is good, but you could add a lot more of desciption of the emotion he is feeling, from the sadness to the anger he feels could be much ...

Wow i really like this, and im going to be off to read the second part in a minute. Its sort of Final Fantasy like, what with the airships and ...

Ohhh my spelling will always ruin me lol, im terrrible, but i try, honest! Thanks for pointing these out for me. Im thinking about writing more, but i dont really ...

My edit button wont work :'( So i will just post the last lines i didnt finish here :D ******************************* “He did didn’t he?!” Jake jolts up from his recumbent ...

Second part now posted :D

I have made fixed the stupid amount of spelling mistakes now, and i am currently working on the second part which i hope to post soon, hope you will all ...