Published March 25, 2007
A lo-o-ong so-o-ong
a Shórt port
a tall ball
a (fat) bat
A nice rice
and a annoying poem!!!!
(Reply quick!!!!!!!! you dipstick!!!!!!!!!)
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I love this poem by you.
it starts off pretty bland but rhythmic, the lo-o-og song is great.
But why is short spelt shórt?
a (fat) bat, is Ok.
But i agree, annoying begins with a. and it doesn't rhyme with poem. I'm guessing this is the annoying poem?
The last line was utterly funny
I agree with everyone, this poem doesn't rhyme properly and the grammar is wrong.
worse poem ever
are u sure your 49!
The YWS is not a place to post your "thrown together in 5 seconds and has no meaning at all--I just like it because it rhymes" poems. Here we give feedback on poems and writings for serious writers. Please be considerate of the time we are all wasting on this.
Thank you.
WM
I agree with everyone else.
Do be serious next time.
If you were serious, the addition at the end did not help at all. I don't think any of us appreciate you fooling around.
hmmm.....are you posting this just to get replies? to be honest, it sounds like you have just puushed a few words together
Erm, for the books, you need to use 'an' instead of 'a' in your last line.
Also, ration the exclaimation point. They're so overused
Well, better luck next time?
ok. I thought I was weird but you are a whole new level.
funny poem though...
please be serious next time
but u may have started a new style of poem
Charlotte
Makes no sense, you're just mucking around. Please keep your random musings to yourself. Write something properly.
Gurby