There is sorrow in my tears
There's hidden pain in every smile
A love that's gone away
A love time can't erase
One that ran so deep and true
One that has made me so blue
I try hard to just forget
But that's something I can't do
My whole life I've been broken
With a heart that can't be mended
And with every day that passes
I'm drinking from my tear-filled glasses
She was my best friend and my lover
She was my wife, I loved no other
The only one that I ran to
With any problems that I had
She was always there to talk to
Always there to cheer me up
For on any darkened day I had
She was my sun shining so bright
Four months passed and still I miss her
And once again my heart is shattered
I had found no one to heal it
No one looked deep enough to see it
Then one day you came along
And I feel like I'm whole again
So I'll pray that I don't lose you
Because deep down I truley love you
Something about you caught my eye
Something about you made me smile
And I don't know how I could explain it
But I'm giving it a try
When you hold me I feel safe
You take me to a better place
Others may have come before you
But my time with them was a waste
Maybe I'm jumping the gun
Maybe I'm moving way too fast
But I know that you're the one
I want to spend my whole life with...
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No, sorry dear, I didn't read it
She's right, you really should punctuate your poetry, it is SO important. So what I am suggesting is an article that may help you out: Poetry & PunctuationBut I thought I would suggest something for you.
Sorry I didn't actually read and critique it...
cool poem
it's
"Very nice"
Wow i really liked this, sort of reminded me of something that James Blunt might sing. Like Princess said, add punctuation and you will be onto something very very good here!
miyaviloves
I liked this poem.
I don't think so you need to change anything here.
Well done!
But yes where are the puntuations?
Keep writing!