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Re: ...
Hello Fiend, Your piece has been on my screen for a few days, waiting to be reviewed. I have just now figured out what I wanted to say. For now, ...
Apr 14, 2014 -
Re: The Lust of Darkness
I liked the ideas behind this piece. However, with some punctuation and stanza breaks this could be fantastic. To me poetry needs punctuation and sentences just like regular writing. So ...
Mar 13, 2014 -
Re: I am my own enemy.
This piece is fantastic! I adore the topic and ideas you conveyed. The rhyming was nice, but for me it just cheapened something that could have been even better. If ...
Mar 13, 2014 -
Re: clock
I adored this poem, the word choice and topic were quite perfect. I only have a few nitpicks. The structure and punctuation need an overhaul. You had plenty of commas ...
Mar 13, 2014 -
Re: How Jane died.
The ending was absolutely perfect. I can't describe in words how wonderful this is. You capture the pain and sadness with a certain type of beauty that I greatly admire. ...
Mar 6, 2014 -
Re: Swallows of Siberia
This was beautiful. You are a true wordsmith. The lines flow together like poetry, and the ideas are wonderfully presented. I love how you were able to describe the story ...
Jul 13, 2013 -
Re: Don't Tell Me
Wow! This is absolutely fantastic! There is so much emotion and intensity in this poem. I loved how real this piece is. Sometimes I love the timeless aspect of a ...
Jul 13, 2013 -
Re: Vista of Moonlit Night
This is a very good sonnet. I enjoy the imagery in this piece. When you read it you feel the calm I think you were trying to bring out. I ...
Apr 25, 2013 -
Re: Milk and Wine
Wow. This is absolutely amazing. The figurative language in this piece is new, fresh and inventive. I liked the milk and wine idea. My only critique is your "Tit" analogy. ...
Mar 8, 2013 -
Re: Why Do I Love Him ?
I'm slightly confused, I'm not sure if this is just a work in progress or something open ended. but I think your readers would benefit from explanation. If you better ...
Mar 8, 2013 -
Re: Sparkly Pants.
Well this was interesting. At first I saw this going in a different direction, but now I can't see it ending any differently. I love the ending of this poem. ...
Dec 21, 2012 -
Re: We Would Have Been Spared The Heartache
This piece really hit home with me and I loved it. I understand the wondering and questioning (I lost my boyfriend and best friend to suicide a year ago.) I ...
Dec 20, 2012 -
Re: Bull in my China soul
This is so powerful, intense, and bone chilling. The figurative language gives a whimsical but dark feel. The erratic line length actually gave this piece a interesting flow, which I ...
Dec 20, 2012 -
Re: Deleted 33
Wow, this is so real. The truth in this piece is almost scary like you pulled it from your very thoughts. At first the format and lack of capitalization through ...
Dec 20, 2012 -
Re: too scared to get burnt
This is a great piece. You convey a lot of emotion and feeling that I very much appreciate. However I believe this poem would be so much better with a ...
Dec 20, 2012
