misspriss

It was okay, and I agree doesn't seem to have anything to do with faith, however, here is my critique. On the first verse, last line, you should have ended ...

This is pretty DARN good for a twelve year old. :-) I thought it was good and can really only repeat what Phorcys said, it could have used some more ...

Why harsh? Do you mean unbelievable? (Sorry Arclight, but if we don't believe that you wrote it when you were seven and you did, then we just paid you a ...

Oh, and something else I thought of, sometimes it just seems like your saying, "And he did that, and then she did this..." Add vivid words to describe HOW he ...

I didn't get to read all of it, I'll read the rest when I have more time. These are some errors I found... I it weren’t for those highwaymen Did ...

I really have no clue, but I'm going to critque your post. ;-) Firstly, capitilize your i's, it shows a lack of confidence and self-respect if you don't. Secondly, when ...

It was a bad joke, I'm sorry, but it wasn't even that funny, plus a little crude. The ending kind of left me with a shocked I'm-obligated-to-laugh feeling. Believe me ...

You write… What you think, You think… what you see, You see… what you feel, That’s what we say You write your feelings. This word makes almost no sense whatsoever. ...

Oh. What can I say? It's sooo...fantastically weird and haunting. Congratulations, you've just given me the weirdest sensation ever. It's almost like I enjoyed it yet...I hated it. Hmm...I will ...

It was very well written, and I'm not sure if someone already said this but when you said, "A fair-haired, pale maiden with pools of blue and full red lips." ...

Awww! How sweet! This is such a wonderful story, however, I did find several typing errors, like you said claming instead of calming at one point. Anyway, I'm going to ...

That is such a hooker! Wow! As you probably noticed, I like it. I didn't find anything wrong with I guess I can't really critique it. But it does give ...

Yes, this does tell a story and paints a picture in your mind! It's so sad...especially the part about the, This is a setting sun lighting the face of a ...

Do you mean to say magick instead of magic? Anyway, there are A LOT of grammar mistakes, so I suggest you read this aloud to yourself and I think you ...

I'm sorry, but if your really 13 years old I suggest you go take writing classes for three years and come back and try to patch up your reputation. I'm ...