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Haha! Brilliant :)

The rhyme works just fine. :) Read Roald dahl's 'Revolting Rhymes' for more inventive pairings, Snionk. I can recommend them if you need a laugh! This is a very funny ...

Thank you for your lovely comment! :)

This is just brilliant! I think I particularly love that ending - just perfect, how you link the ending back to the very beginning after all the thinking. Keep on ...

A beautiful haiku. I think you captured the feeling so well here! I like this a lot. :)

Thank you so much! :)

PS Forgot to mention, another typo I spotted - 'breath' should be 'breathe' :)

Thank you for the suggestions - I think you're right about splitting it into two sentences. I really do think that works better - cheers! :) I'm afraid to edit ...

Aha! Thank you - that is so helpful. :) (Now I just have to memorise it, haha! ;) )

This is lovely - really deft and well-expressed, much like a painter making marks on paper. :) I have the sense of new beginnings, hope and optimism when I read ...

It looks good! I think it works well as a repeated verse like you have done here, so it's a great idea to keep it in its original position and ...

Thank you - that's a good suggestion. I like it. :) But it was written with a specific person in mind who is UBER sceptical about anything like that, so ...

Thank you so much! :)

Hi Shayla! Welcome to YWS - I'm new here myself but it seems like a nice place. Thanks for your kind words. I'm really glad you liked the poem! :)

Thank you, TTYF! :)