mikepyro

It's solid, but def coil be improved. Fr too much time is spent a a summary of why the main character knows ether than letting events play out. Also, fly ...

It's pretty good. Not nearly as amazing as most people say, maybe it's too teen drama at some points for my taste, but it's a good movie. Great acting an ...

This could be great. As of now it's only good. First, the length, it's rediculous, for this type of tale emotion must be punchy and lasting, but delivered over time. ...

It's a solid piece. I love the theme and the story overall. I must say though that I don't feel much connection to any characters aside the main one, they're ...

I like it, but it's hardly a prologue. It's more like a blurb. Overall I could see you developing a strong tale around this idea and I'd wish you bet ...

I enjoyed it, which is something I rarely say f stories of this type. It's a strong voice that remains present throughout and a nice use of vivid imagery, which ...

It's as if the piece is written by two people. I loved the last half, the flickering hand that dies, the last 7 limes are brilliant, haunting, and subtle as ...

It's well witten enough with a decent flow and solid structure, but just a tired theme. If one takes on suh a theme it must be told through a unique ...

oh my god this is so much better than most junk poems on here! :D proffesional, powerful, sublime. very very good. i will say the overuse of the exclamation points ...

Well its certainly better than most first story pieces, but it needs alot of work. You jump around far too often, your characters aren't well developed and you switch from ...

It's cute, sweet I guess. I can't take it seriously as it isn't really a poem or even a fully realized humor piece, it's just a witty anecdote. That's nice, ...

Its much better than most poetry I read here, I must admit, so congrats! :D Its a lovely little piece, despite some shaky rhyming schemes, that managed a few chuckles ...

I really enjoed the theme and the actual emotion as well, but god the rhyming truly is terrible here. Please don't do rhyming poetry if you can't pull it off, ...

Its a decent piece. You manage a lyrical and heavy style quite well and your words rhyme without stumbling over each other. I must say it is a rather cliche ...

This piece wasn't that bad. I must say I didn't really find it very tense or creepy though, just sort of entertaining. It's a good story and well developed idea, ...