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Wow. This is............ Amazing!
It flows so beautifully - I absolutely LOVE it!!!
This is my favourite couplet. It - and the entire poem at that - is just brilliant.
Fantastic job! Don't ever stop writing!
Two thumbs up!
Amy.
Excellent. Straight up good. I really enjoyed this piece. I normally like to put in a favorite line when I review a poem, but this have so many parts I like that its hard to pick.
That one would have to be up there though. Right next to it, of course, is this couplet.
Anyway, nice job. You can defiantly see where your heart is.
~Dragongirl
P.S. I keep wanting to sign out with, DG you know, instead of Dragongirl, but unforunately DG is also the initials for Dollar General. Do you think anyone will notice? What would you do?
oh my god this is so much better than most junk poems on here!
proffesional, powerful, sublime. very very good.
i will say the overuse of the exclamation points in the last five lines take away a bit of the power of the last point. i usually tear apart most pieces on here but I admit that this was quiet stunning for me, well done.
Beautiful simplicity! I love the title! my favorite line
this poem reminded me of a book I read. Here's a quote that I think applies to this poem
Simplicity is a form of artistry that all of us have yet to master, but you have firm grasp upon it more so than others. That shows to me an understanding of life. This poem was wonderful! Thank you.
-Tory
helloo Hayden!
I absolutely love this write! It's beautiful! And that's all I actually wanted to say XD
Love it!!
-qaralynn-
Call me the biggest fool of them all, because I absolutely love this poem you're written here! I've found quite a few Christian poems today, so I'm happy, and this one is one of the best!
I don't know where else I've ever seen a more beautiful and poetic portrayal of Jesus Christ other than in the Bible! Well done my friend, this truly is a wonderful image. I can picture Jesus, going from place to place and preaching, met with jeers and insults from many. Wonderful picture (:
There are whole books that attempt to simplify such a cornerstone of Christianity as you have done here. You're a regular theologian in your own right, my friend
- SOCKS
I don't know but all your stuff is making me cry. I think that's a good thing. This poem was interesting. I liked the flow and the word choice. I wish my poems did that. (check em out to see what I mean
) That's all I can really say about this because I found nothing wrong with this poem. Keep writing!!!! I hope to see your name on bookshelves at B&N. Good luck!!!
Thanks!!
I love what you have done here! This is an amazing piece, new and refreshing! I can not find the right words to explain how....how....how...um...AWESOME this poem is!
Keep up the good work!
KJR