lordgluzman

Okay I will try. What I usually like to write about is morals and justice songs.

Actually our homework was just simply describe something.

It was good! You deserve a star man. I have nothing to correct you with. I haven't read a good poem about America in a long time. The only part ...

Actually I have a melody for this song. If you would hear this under my melody the rhyming would be fine. But I understand what you meen.

Thanks

This is only an introduction because it is super short. I have noothing more to say but if you finnish this song it will be good. But if not then ...

Okay...... Number one this should be in the poem section. Number two it was to short. Number three some of the rhyming was forced. Number 4 It is a pretty ...

is not exactly telling that life shits. It explains that you have to stand up for your self.

I guess this is Heeavy Metal (Yay). If it is not Metal then it's propobly rap. I liked the words and the emotions but it was too short for me. ...

OMG, I can't stop laughing so can't my friends that are reading this behind my back. Give me please couple seconds..............Man! You are the funniest poem writer on this website. ...

Robert maybee.... That is actually my name. Emanuel Asher Elias Olli Anzius Stewi

That was really good. I wont grade the grammar or the punctuation because I am bad at it. You brought emotions which is good but I didn't get what you ...

Thanks! Yea it's metal.

Poems don't have to rhyme. Sometimes when you rhyme too much the poem goes bad. Very well retten. I liked the moral and emotions that you showed.

This song was pretty good but not your best. I think you need to work on the lyrics more. I think this should be in the poem section.