lluvialover

I really enjoyed readiing this, it's like I actually lived in the story. It sounds so real and beautiful =)

this poem has a great moral message. I really like it, but it didn't have a beat or some kind of rhythm to it. When you just read it, it ...

like this although i noticed you used the same looking character in Eternity. I will keep on reading =)

Everyone, thank you for your comments =) I did intend for Deniss to sound creepy and I am glad it worked out. Watch for the next part of my story ...

I didn't get this poem at all... I didn't get what it was about, what the emotion was supposed to be, or anything. I can't say that I got anything ...

I love your story, I can even imagine a movie made out of it. It is a pleasure to read!

Thank you so much for reminding me to make those corrections! I will be more then glad to hear what you think about the rest of it.

i like it.it's real sweet and short. sorry for my lack of criticism, but i don't see anything wrong with it, and I don't know enough about poems to judge ...

wow it's like you put a story of one life into one poem, and that's a hard thing to do. good job!

Through million doors Make this 'through a million doors' or 'through millions of doors' I felt my hand touch yours. Beyond grand mountains and cold lakes , a s fast ...

It really is passionate!the only mistake I found was in this line: I come back up and rips off his jacket shouldn't it be rip? I really love this poem ...

Good, good. I just felt like the end wasn't really powerful, like it wasn't meant to end there. And there were a few parts that were oddly broken up. I ...

I like all the details, it gives you a feel that you are actually there, but also it makes me want to know what exactlyhappens with the man? or is ...

I can imagine them sing it already. I really like it, reminds me of shakespeare.