lilgreendots

I'm a flickering light, A unknown shadow, No one around to hear my sorrow Fragile as glass, About to break, No one there to see my face In darkened alleys, ...

Hey FlyerS, Who breaks but remains unbroken? Who bore first life but does not live? Who is poisoned by her greatest children? Who gave all and continues to give? What ...

Ligea, I'm going to have to agree with with the other reviewers. Is the dove suppose to be a metaphor for something because it didn't communicate it that clearly. And ...

Rememberme, I love the poem, because you managed to find a way to incorporate a lot of feeling and emotion, while making it rhyme. I just wanted to know what ...

Hello There. Teamdelware, this was AMAZING!! You could really feel the emotion and it kept me hooked on the whole time. The only thing I would maybe change is everytime ...

Hi SakuraFallsSweetly, I didn't see any mistakes except for the first word: Icey, and the word shiney in the second stanza Isn't it suppose to be Icy, and Shiny???? Other ...

Hey thatBoy, Like SilentRain said, there weren't really any grammatical errors in the piece, so I'll just give an overall review. So in the first two lines, I noticed that ...

Hey shannaBanana, This was well written except for the errors in writing. This was a great read, but the thing I would change is how you formatted it. It would ...

I knew this was from a song :D!!!! It was very well written and the only thing is the fact that you have two lines and then four (Maybe three ...

This was an interesting piece. I didn't do a full grammar review, but in the second paragraph when you said "It sounded too good to be true" to should be ...

A small girl in blue sat all alone on the playground at recess. Try sing a sentence that will hook the reader in more She watched all the other children ...

Grandmother's Watch The coffee mug clicked against the glass plate underneath as he lifted it to his mouth, the contents sloshing against the sides due to his shaking hands. A ...

This story is based off of the song Chasing Cars by Snow Patrol. I placed some of the lyrics in the story and they should be in italics if it ...

This is a story I'm writing for a local short-story competition. Please criticize as much as possible!! The Tears of Battle I sprang into the fight, wildly swinging my sword ...

I'm not going to review this because everyone else already did, but this was an amazing story. I saw it on the featured list, but I wasn't going to read ...