A sea of questions.

Who breaks but remains unbroken?
Who bore first life but does not live?
Who is poisoned by her greatest children?
Who gave all and continues to give?

What is sad and mysterious?
What causes young men to roam?
What is low and thick, and high and thin?
What makes the turtle leave home?

Why does it soothe us when resting?
Why does it terrify when riled?
Why will it kill an old man?
Why doesn't it save a young child?

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Baconator
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Just curious, what is the poem talking about? It seems to sound like it's inffering nature, as in the first stanza,

Who breaks but remains unbroken?
Who bore first life but does not live?
Who is poisoned by her greatest children?
Who gave all and continues to give?
Just a guess. I like the way it makes the reader interpret his own thoughts about what it's talking about. Very intresting and thought provoking work! :)

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lilgreendots
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Hey FlyerS,

Who breaks but remains unbroken?
Who bore first life but does not live?
Who is poisoned by her greatest children?
Who gave all and continues to give?

What is sad and mysterious?
What causes young men to roam?
What is low and thick, and high and thin?
What makes the turtle leave home?

Why does it soothe us when resting?
Why does it terrify when riled?
Why will it kill an old man?
Why doesn't it save a young child?


I really like the idea of the poem, but I didn't understand it that much. Was the whole poem aking a question about one thing was was each stanza asking questions for a seperate thing. And also was the reader suppose to answer the question with ease or are they just questions to ponder, and not really answer.

There weren't any grammatical errors, and other than it being a little confusing it was a fun read and I enjoyed reading it. Hope I could help.

-lilgreendots <3

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Eniarrol
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I like this style of writing poetry with the questions but I don't quite get what your writing about and it doesn't seem quite finished but that might be just me. Good Job! Keep writing, I can't wait to hear more from you soon.



It's like everyone tells a story about themselves inside their own head. Always. All the time. That story makes you what you are. We build ourselves out of that story.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind