lakegirls

Hi, Everyone has pretty much picked up on the error's that I found so I am just here to praise you. This story was well written and intriguing right to ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! First things first, we have a little rule here that you have to review two stories for every post, just to make sure that everyone's work ...

Hi, I really, really liked this story. I think you mentioned that the "end was crappy" but really it is quite good. My English teacher told us about different endings ...

Hi, I see no one else has gotten a chance to review your story so I am happy to be the first. Before you post something else though, be sure ...

Hi, Very good, again. I picked up on a few minor mistakes, but after reading the comments I realized that they were already covered. Keep writing! This is an excellent ...

Hi, Good job on this story. Very cute, very catchy. I can defiantly see it on shelves of a bookstore some day! So onto the review: All my edits, comments ...

Hi, This is a very interesting piece you have here. Although, reading about the hardship, if you could even call it that, that all slaves went through makes me feel ...

Hi, I have never actually reviewed a narrative poem, so this will be my first. I believe that poetry is free expression, so nothing you have written I think you ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you love this site as much as I do :) This piece is truly intriguing. I really hope that this is not based off ...

Wow. That is all I can say. Though a bit strange at first this story was very well written and intriguing. I think you should defiantly keep the name Child ...

Hi, I see no one has given you a full crtic yet, so I'll do the honour of being your first. Okay, what I'm going to do is copy and ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! We have a rule here that you must review two pieces before posting something yourself. I read only up to half of your story because it ...

Hi, Great story! I love how you thought of it while washing the dishes. I'm horrible for that. I actually have a book that I write all my ideas down ...

Hi, Very intriguing but I think we need a bit more to understand fully what's going on. I get the gist of it; that this girl or guy is someone ...

Hi, Interesting piece. I defiantly want to read more of this. There are a few places I had concerns... will actually nitpicks... Each day I choose a new name, it’s ...