ladydark

wow. that like.. gave me shivers. Personally, I love things that have a lot of description, and right from the beginning the poem drew me in. I saw no faults, ...

okay. this is an... interesting poem to say the least. However, it doesn't quite flow right. I don't think it does at least. Some places can have words taken out, ...

aye, it's v. catchy. Good rhyming, however.. why don't you expand? Like, who is that girl, why is she calling the person if the person themselves doesn't know them. Maybe ...

aye. you need to fix the grammar in this. you need a comma after me in the last line. "Then you threw it back at me, but all I said ...

oooh, that is the best story ever! what a piece, what a beautiful, lovely heart warming story. I've never read or seen better. I'm so jealous now :cry: also, tons ...

okay.. that was.. very odd, and kind of mean. In my opinion at least, duno about other people, but I think you should change it to something else. It kind ...

haha.. nice.. and tbr :( what do you mean by thaat, Irish rule, but anywyas, ya, got a gooood beginning but then it sorta... went down hill quite quickly, the ...

mommy? I dont want to eat hotdogs no more... :P wow, that is sumfin to reallly wake you up on a sunday morning... nice... -goes off to torment other people ...

hahaha, niiice... such a true guys version... though I wouldn't know ^-^'', last time I checked I'm not a guy, and 'sides... never had a guy to share valentines with... ...

excellent... whatever you may call it... ''poem'', but utterly true... chocolate rules. end of discussion. if you argue with me, I will whoop you so hard ye children will feel ...

ditto, please break it up into paragraphs, else wise we won't be able to crit it... well ari crit it... I'll read, and point out what I see, but ya... ...

hmm... that was... interesting I guess the word would be... the ending is a bit off, could fix it a bit, espically in the second to last stanza, it Is ...

huh... quite fascinating if I do say so myself... yes no structure so to see but it still flowed pretty nicely together, goood story, odd but funny ending... sounds a ...

hmm, highly fascinating, if I wasn't so under the weather I'd find mistakes, but I can't at the moment so good job... there is one thing, dont just throw in ...

-squeaks loudly and runs around pointing at the horrible grammer!- I'm sure its a very nice story... just fix the grammer please and thank you, then I'll crack down on ...