~The note in your locker that I wish I had the nerve to put in there~
wrote a note that I was gonna put in your locker yesterday
handwrote it all nicely and filled it with love and poetry
said somethings I don't know if I should have said
said somethings I don't know if you wanted to hear
I folded it up and put it in my pocket
walked around with it all day long
thought of how and when I was gonna put it in there
I looked at it a couple of times
wondered if I really wanted to do this
wanted to tell someone, but they might tell you
signed it secret admirer but what good would that do
walked over to your locker and stood right in front of it
stared at it for awhile, but it won, I blinked
It was almost like we were having a mental conversation
Then you came by and I acted like I dropped my pencil
you said "hi" and I said "wassup"
Then I left. I know I probably looked like an idiot.
The next day you came up to me and we started talking
I was surprised because this had never happened before
I decided that I was definately gonna put it in there today
so I patted my pockets with confidence
but the note wasn't there
Then you looked up at me and said
"looking for this"?
DAMN
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huh... quite fascinating if I do say so myself... yes no structure so to see but it still flowed pretty nicely together, goood story, odd but funny ending... sounds a bit like something my friend did once... but it was all good in the end... so ya, nifty poem...
I loved the way it flowed. I really do not think it needs punctation because I like the way it flows without punctation. But I am not the person to ask because I am a horrible poet. I thought the ending was very good and a tad bit ironic.
this was cute and funny, despite lack of structure, rhythm, imagery, poetic style...er....
well, i'm not exactly sure it was even a poem but it kept my interest and i enjoyed.
it had flair.
Actually, I like this - I know it had no structure, and was more like a story than anything else, but it worked somehow. It kind of just...flowed....
lol it's cute.
I'm not entirely sure whether I think it works as a poem, but also, I think I think it does...because...
Oh my god. I know this is really unhelpful, but I don't know why it works, or why I like it. It just does and I do. I'm not saying it's the most amazing thing I've ever read, but it's pretty good in an undefinable way!
Interesting lack of almost any punctuation and pretty much no structure, but I liked how it was just kind of a flowing of thought, and it had a pretty funny ending.