ladcat13

This story really should have been rated 18+. It was really confusing. There were also some punctuation errors that interrupted the flow. Why were all the pronouns for the narrator ...

Dextra sounds positively, horridly, perfectly, hellishly, insane! I love the rumors you related about her. I also like how you phrased her speech. You can almost hear the cold, calculating, ...

Ooooo creepy! I like how detached it sounds, since the soul is, after all, detached from the body! But I'm confused: did a random guy with a knife who stabbed ...

There are a few mistakes with commas, mostly the absence of them, which causes a few run-ons. There are also a few instances where three or four sentences start with ...

I like this message of hope, and I like the ongoing metaphor. Very poetic, even though its not a poem :) I also like the references to Judo and martial ...

Like murtuza said, the meaning is a little obscure. But I like it. And I like how it was written in a kind of meth-induced haze, like you can really ...

I like this. I know we all feel like this sometimes, and I like how at the end you reminded us that we must bring the change ourselves, not wait ...

yeah, there are some grammar errors, but it's not that bad. It only takes away from the meaning a little bit. Your punctuation at the end of stanzas, however, could ...

I do agree with MissCaroline that the lack of paragraphs and the question mark thing is confusing. Maybe the reason the formatting screwed up is because of the font you ...

What a heartache. Alas, a heart never mends completely. But hopefully the word "fogrgiveness" will. Little typo there. But I like the repetition of that last stanza, kind of like ...

The first two stanzas or so were super complicated and hard to comprehend, but the rest of it was beautiful and poetic. It has a nice rhythm and I like ...

Aww, so sad. I guess it was clever, though. I like the description. The empty chair thing is a nice way to portray it. I also like the way that ...

Wow! That's a really cool set-up! You should turn it into a longer story. It certainly has a lot of potential. I want to know what happens to her neighbor's ...

I like the message of what indecision, uncertainty, and stress in general can do to people. I also like the subtle, rhythmic rhyme scheme. And the length. like RainGrae said, ...

I think this is cute. I like Daft Punk too, though I don't idolize them or anything, but I agree. Music should be more fun and maybe a bit more ...