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It is very good, I like and I can think of a few choice words that would fit this.

No, no it's good, maybe I'll do something like that, a rapist caterpillar, but I went to the other chapters and added a bit more gruesome stuff but the tea ...

I haven't got to anything I cold turn into horror, I am following the original story line of the book, however when we get to the tea party that'll be ...

I was trying to say that the eaglet hit the grown so hard that it went all over the place, i changed it to covered alice and the other birds ...

A skinny Peter Pettigrew would work nicely for the description of the rabbit man

This is honestly one of the greatest things I have ever read and I read good books. In my opinion this is better then the love between Percy and Annabeth, ...

I went back on did some changes added some question marks, and I think like one exclamation point and I rewrote the ending, I think it's a bit better.

The names are the bird they are

I felt like I needed to explain the it spoke slowly once, I'll change it to say that it speaks with trouble or something. I'm trying to show the dodo ...

I think that this is a very good piece of works and I liked how you were able to make it rhyme. I didn't see any spelling mistakes or grammatical ...

I like it when people write stories about homosexual relationships. I think that this really shows how some of us feel about our sexuality. I really hope you do more ...

I really like this and I may even refer back to it later when I'm writing.

I feel like Matthew's brother is around eight or younger. It fells like his character changes closer to the end and it makes him see older unless a third character ...

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