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  • Poetry » Spiritual, General Re: I'm gonna make it

    I sang all of this! These make great religious song lyrics. There are a few mistakes in wording (like "I've either..." where it should be "have either..."), grammar, and spacing, ...

    Dec 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Culture, General Re: ​Step 1: Rehumanization

    A cultural commentary poem about personal façades, I see it. Our walls will all break down eventually. When the time comes, what will our inside-selves look like when we've been ...

    Dec 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Other Re: i travelled the world thirteen times over

    Is there a conversation between two people between the gray bolded and regular fonts? Let's start with the beginning: "here is a memoir in scarlet paint. proceed with caution and ...

    Dec 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: On The Edge Of Bliss

    It's not romantic love! It's only romance! And it's a fleeting thing, too. Sigh. Oh well! ;) Romance, this feeling of excitement and mystery associated with a new love, the ...

    Dec 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Hidden Memories

    What a wonderful idea. What you have here is a good skeleton to start another poem from, I think. If you would give this poem another look, I would suggest ...

    Dec 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: A Feminine Definition

    Is the definition of "feminine" from a feminine perspective, that there is no definition? Is that the poem? You talk about feminists, anatomical attributes, appearance, and gender roles as if ...

    Dec 12, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: foliage

    I can't tell if this leaf is a metaphorical representation of a person. I thought, "Poem About Leaf," at first, but now I'm thinking, "Love Poem?" A leaf will, sure, ...

    Dec 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Review, General Re: Bangladesh

    Home is where the heart is, and maybe that place you would say is beyond the Earth, but the land of Bangladesh is very much a part of the Earth, ...

    Dec 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: The Ocean of Expectations

    It’s relatable, feeling overwhelmed by others’ expectations of yourself. You try your best to meet all of their expectations, but you never do enough. You’re over the edge, emotionally. Your ...

    Dec 10, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: The Dog That Ruled Alone

    The length! It is long, for sure. You’ve chosen this rhyme scheme, and there are a few kinks in the rhythm that should be ironed out, first, I think, before ...

    Dec 10, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Where I'm From (for class)

    Soft, gentle, and smooth flowing from one memory to another: you wrap around from the start at Union Station to an end at Union Station. You may think you can't ...

    Dec 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: evaporating days and re-accumulating memories

    Ooh! This was a long one and very melodrama. The very intense imagery and flourishes of prose make the story sort of murky, and I'll tell you how I've read ...

    Dec 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Culture, Lyrical Re: Christmas time

    Red and green and gold tinsel or a mistletoe, lights on the house and reindeer hooves, wrapping paper all aglow in candlelight and - can you smell the gingersnaps? Including ...

    Dec 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: To Judge

    "Judge me only as soon as I may judge you." This is a great message and certainly one that all of us need reminding once in awhile, but I've got ...

    Dec 8, 2014
  • Poetry » General, Spiritual Re: Solstice

    "the days will grow longer only after the lingering night." Your poem's end is very bright, and I like that growth: starting with the faint glow of a cigarette's tip, ...

    Dec 8, 2014


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