katiemay

Awesome. I like how it flows together. Good job.

I like the way it begins but i think the ending needs work. Otherwise its great. Keep writing! :)

Thanks you guys for the reviews and I understand what you are saying about that line....I had doubts about the line but otherwise this poem just came to me. :) ...

wow i kinda loved this poem but kinda hated it....i loved it but i hated that you made the right assumption about was nice and fit together lol....i can't stop ...

This is a least the way i learned how to make makes you wonder what it is exactly you're writing about.......

Wow that was harsh...i wonder what drove you to write this piece? Sounds very interesting and i liked reading it...it's fillled with hate mixed with adoration. Very unique.

Thanks guys, for reviewing. :)

I liked how the last two lines seem to finish it. IT's very symbolic, in my opinion...:D good job.

I like all the creativity!!!!!! Nice descriptions. But where did the father come in? When did he show up? Very good, i hope you keep writing on it.

I loved how full of action it was. I hope you keep writing on it and make it into an official book. :)

I loved this poem. everything about seemed to flow together naturally....keep writin poetry you could be a great poet someday!!!! :)

I liked how she was able to change his mind by pointing out that he wasn't brave, i think it shows how guys think in todays world. :)

DUDE!!! i hate the suspense!!! but nice writing. it's like you could be there