My Inspiration

--> wow! *clap-hands* you are truly great! So sure that if your "inspiration" read this- he/she will be so happy! *thumbs-up* Good job!

This is amazing, the rhythm and rhyme are absolutely perfect in the poem!
I think the meaning of the poem is very obvious: how you're in the middle of a writer's block, and then you meet someone who inspires you in many ways.
However, that doesn't make it any less powerful.
Beautiful poem. Keep writing .

i really like this poem, however i think it could be longer, and not so rhymey. I think a little bit of rhyming in this poem is really good, but for it's length the rhyming gets a little repetitive.

Very nice.

As you probably already know, love poems are done very often and can often feel clichéd and repetitive.

However this has a twist or a different format. I like your use of writers block as a format for a love poem.

My only problem is the flow. It can feel a bit bumpy and clunky.

Besides that it's really lovely.

Very nice.

As you probably already know, love poems are done very often and can often feel clichéd and repetitive.

However this has a twist or a different format. I like your use of writers block as a format for a love poem.

My only problem is the flow. It can feel a bit bumpy and clunky.

Besides that it's really lovely.

Amazing, amazing, amazing. I really like this poem and honestly cannot think of any critiques. I loved your rhyming and I felt that all of the words just flowed perfectly together. On top of that, there were no spelling errors, which earns you even more points in my book. Keep on writing! :)

Very nice, and I think this can make a good song, but it is great as it is, except for...

"None of my words were chosen right"--kind of awkward, I'd try "None of my words could say it right."

the great thing about this poem is how you make an awkward style flow so well, without these exact words it would be hard for this poem to work, and you made it work, and that takes talent,

soooooo.....

BRAVO, 4 out of 5 stars.

WRITER'S BLOCK SUCKS.

i can relate to finding an "inspiration" which seemed to make reading this poem more inspiring, may i say, and put me on the same level as you. loved it!

My mind was empty, my soul as well,
I could not find a tale to tell.
Even my pen refused to write,
None of my words were chosen right. This is my favorite stanza because I went through a period when I just couldn't write. Amen to this!

And then you came, my world you changed,
My soul, my life you rearranged.
You made my fantasies come true. It feels like you're missing a syllable here
I wrote on paper about you.

First of all, I'd like to say I know where you're coming from and I find this very amiable. Though, it was a bit bumpy at times in terms of rhythm and rhyme (although the rhymes gave it some charm).

I like it. we all have our sources of insprition.

Hey. I liked this. It flowed well and the rhyming was good and very clever.

My mind was empty, my soul as well, These first two lines are a good start, it draws the readers in well.
I could not find a tale to tell.
Even my pen refused to write, I liked these two lines as well.
None of my words were chosen right.

And then you came, my world you changed,
My soul, my life you rearranged. I liked the rhyming in these lines.
You made my fantasies come true. These two lines I felt were a bit forced.
I wrote on paper about you. Maybe different words so it flows better.

Each word you speak is poetry,
When I'm with you I feel so free. I don't think that this was the best rhyme you could have used.
I tell you, without hesitation: Good creativity on the rhyming in these lines.
You are my source of inspiration!

Each move you make recites a story, Nice metaphor.
Each dance of yours means grace and glory.
You're my one and only salvation
You are my only inspiration!

I like this poem .
I can't find anything wrong with it, except for the comma that should come after 'my life' like this:

writerwithacause wrote:My soul, my life, you rearranged.

Eh. Well, clever rhyming, I suppose, even if it was a bit annoying.

And then you came, my world you changed,
My soul, my life, you rearranged.
You made my fantasies come true.
I wrote on paper about you.

You are my source of inspiration!

Thank you so much to both of you!

I loved this poem. everything about seemed to flow together naturally....keep writin poetry you could be a great poet someday!!!!

Hey there,
Wow this is such a nice poem. Love it!!
Bravo!!!
xxx Upile xx