jumpingsheep

Wow, this was an intriguing start! I liked how you didn't info-dump the circumstances of James' escape and instead told the story through the dialogue and short bits of needed ...

Hi! You mentioned in the summary that you had previously done poetry, and I think you definitely used that to your advantage here! The sentences were so beautiful and poetic ...

I think that this is a very intriguing start to a novel! I like how you started with some action, and then flashes back to talk about how you got ...

I enjoyed reading this as I found it to sound realistic as a teen writing it. I thought you nailed the feelings that come with moving to a new community ...

Wow! I thought this was a really thoughtful, powerful poem. Many of these fears can be related to. I for one thought felt that the expectations one really spoke to ...

Wow! This was a great start! I really enjoyed reading this and I am excited to see where this is going. James seems like a smart and capable kid, which ...

I enjoyed reading this! I found the idea of silent speakers to be really intriguing and I can't wait to find out more! Is there a maximum distance that they ...

Wow! This was an exciting short story, and I enjoyed the suspense, as I had no idea what the main character was going to do. Were they going to run ...

Wow I really enjoyed reading this! The classroom setting was extremely relatable and I enjoyed the bits of humor that were included. The characterization was extremely solid and I felt ...

Wow! This was a really interesting script! I also liked the idea of having the teacher narrate, and I found it intriguing when the second child picked the angel as ...

Wow! This was a beautifully written piece, I enjoyed reading the lyrical descriptions and imagery. I was a bit confused on where the story was heading... is it a story ...

I think this is a strong start to a story, although I am a little confused on the setting. Does this take place in the future? I think you characterized ...

Wow, this story had me hooked right from the beginning! I loved the concept of it; t'was a nice twist on "lovers searching for each other". I would be wary ...

This is so relatable and very funny! I have this problem all the time, and I just kind of gave up too :P I liked how you were able to ...

Woah, this is a really neat idea! So, can this character store anything he wants in a pocket dimension? The description and imagery in this chapter was really vivid and ...