joshuapaul

I liked this. I wasn't hooked at first but it was short enough for me to press on. I think this is really original, whilst reading it part of me ...

This is pro Twit. Almost every line went by without any jarring little errors. It's very balanced and I think you have done an amazing job fleshing out your protagonist. ...

Wow, just wrote you a review. Stupid YWS just submitted it halfway through then deleted it and now I'm left with nothing. This is kind of good. The sort of ...

Okay back as promised. Let me begin by saying, this is my favourite form of fiction to write - probably because I am lazy - so it goes without saying, ...

Okay this needs a lot of work. My edits are in red. Also a couple of tips at the conclusion. I love writing and always wanted to have a profession ...

Wow, Confetti. Wow. I'm so happy to see this, to experience this. I was really looking forward to your response to my challenge, and my have you delivered. I wish ...

There is a lot to be said about this story thus far, little intrinsic errors that I don't have the time to go over with you. I will say two ...

This was good. I don't have time now for a full critique. One thing did strike me however they’ve to shield their eyes they've is they have , abbreviated. So ...

Let me begin by saying, you really put yourself out there with this, so I commend you. When you say you wrote it for a friend, do you mean for ...

A quick review before I go to bed. I won't bother with nitpicks, it was short and as far as GPS goes, there was nothing glaring. So I turn to ...

The biggest problem with this is the intro. Rework it, because as it stands it isn't very good at all. It isn't a hook, you seem to dive straight into ...

This is good, I enjoyed it. I won't delve into a full critique for now maybe I will come back to it. The main reason I replied is to show ...

And herein lies the fallacy of YWS. I had never read this, and in the section 'recommended for you' the formula spews out generic teen-angst poetry and joke stories I ...

I wanted to express my admiration, but as a rule I don't 'like' work that the author has liked. This also read's like lyrics, and is blighted with fixable errors. ...

This was pretty good. I'm all very new to lyric critiquing so I won't harp on. I was wondering, however, why change it from a poem to a song? or ...