jessiethought

Wow. So, I feel like this poem could be about two separate people, the speaker and the addressee, or about one person: the speaker, speaking to himself (herself). The title ...

You have great vocabulary and juxtapose words in some extremely interesting ways. The main confusion I have with this poem is, well, confusion.... Throughout a lot of this poem I'm ...

Nice poem! Definitely a surprising ending! Throughout this whole poem I was thinking, "Is this to an ex-boyfriend/girlfriend? A friend who became an enemy? An evil clique?" Oh, no. It's ...

I really don't have much nitpicking to do for this song! :) You grammar seems great. And I have no problems with your subject, or word choice, or tone of ...

Hmm. I don't have time to read this whole thing right now. This is kind of long. The one suggestion I have at this point is to publish the story ...

You have yet another sonnet! Whew! On a roll with sonnets, huh? ;) All right, "let's get down to business" ... to defeat the typos. (I really mangled that Mulan ...

I'm back to review another of your sonnets! Again, congratulations on actually finishing some; I never can. I get stuck after the first two quatrains or so. :) First of ...

I agree with pretty much everything fortis already said; so, sorry if I'm not really pointing out anything you didn't already know--I'll just corroborate fortis's opinion. Perhaps stop your first ...

Good advice; interesting thoughts here. The only real nitpick I have is that you labelled this poetry, but it doesn't feel like poetry. Maybe this should be "other"? If you ...

Excellent title! I really like the subject of this story: a missed chance, a lost meeting. The voice of your narrator is clear and consistent throughout the story. Good job. ...

I really like some of your phrasing in this poem! For example, the lines "eyes are meant to guide the way, but yours make me get lost." Some suggestions: Make ...

Personally, sonnets are extremely hard for me to write and finish, so congratulations on writing a sonnet! The subject of your sonnet is pretty interesting! For the most part, your ...

This was great! Some things could be improved, of course (when is that not the case, though?) but overall, excellent job. I really enjoyed the juxtaposition of what Asenath is ...

Excellent "legend" and beautiful story! :) I don't have very many nitpicks for this! First, in the beginning of your story you refer to the unicorn as "it," but later ...

Excellent essay! I really enjoyed reading it! I am an American (yeah, one of those ignorant Americans) and I must say I didn't know about the history of Kashmir and ...