(Verse 1)
There are monsters
in the dark
I feel their gaze,
My own hate,
On my skin
As they chase me
To places in my mind
The dark places.
~
And I ran
For so long.
And I run
No more.
~
(Chorus)
I am not afraid
Of the dark,
Of the shade.
I am not afraid.
I will not run
From the dark,
From the night.
I’ll stand and fight.
~
(Verse 2)
My wandering demons
In the dark
Are waiting for
My command
To attack.
They wrack and rend
My dreams
And my thoughts.
And though they leave
They are never gone.
~
And I ran
For so long
And I stand
To fight.
~
(chorus)
I am not afraid
Of the dark,
Of the shade.
I am not afraid.
I will not run
From the dark,
From the night.
I’ll stand and fight.
~
(Verse 3)
The shadows close
O’er the dark,
O’er my mind,
As I stand alone.
Have the demons
Finally won?
I’ll fight as long
As I can.
I’ll beat the shadows back.
~
And I fought,
Fought so hard.
And I’ll fight
for my life.
~
(chorus)
I am not afraid
Of the dark,
Of the shade.
I am not afraid.
I will not run
From the dark,
From the night.
I’ll stand and fight.
Stand and fight…
~
~
~
soundcloud link: https://soundcloud.com/erik-york-1/not-afraid
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hi dear!
i think it is a good try to write a lyric and sing it.the music in the soundcloud is great.i love it.but the rhythm of the lyric doesn't really go with it,bro.there is barely a rhyme! and the music needs the rhyme actually.at some places we really expect some rhymes, we are waiting for the word but there come another that does not go with the previous.i think with this great music it would be great if u could write a lyric that has rhymes.
good luck
I really don't have much nitpicking to do for this song!
You grammar seems great. And I have no problems with your subject, or word choice, or tone of voice. The only suggestion I have is a style/formatting one. The song might be more visually pleasing and make more sense visually if the lines were combined. The lines seem too short, like they are meant to be longer. Even though you may pause at the end of each line (as you have them now) when singing this (my browser won't let me access the soundcloud link), combining every couple of lines into one makes sense to me.
But as for the quality of the lyrics, excellent job! (It's too bad I can't listen to your performance of it. Stupid browser.) Keep writing!
~ jessiethought ~
I'd also like to add I would love to do a cover of this song.
Hello methir123!
I absolutely love this piece! I listened to the song, and now I love it even more so. And in some ways, I can relate. Pieces you can relate to are usually the ones people enjoy the most. I especially like the parts about fighting back, they really stand out. If you post another song, it would be great if you could PM me or something, please consider it.
~Kelpies.
Hello!
I loved the lyrics just from reading it. I then clicked on the link and I love the song. It was incredible! I absolutely loved the song. You can really sing. Great guitar too. I seriously had this on replay for an hour.
I like it! This is like something I would listen to. You wrote it? Lyrics and music? It's good, at least in my opinion. : )
wrote and performed.
Well I think you did a wonderful job. I was really able to relate to this.
link is weird, try this one:
https://soundcloud.com/erik-york-1/not-afraid