jenni321

Hey, welcome to YWS! remember to review some stuff before you post, or you'll have the YWS ninjas after you... anyway... It's good, I think I understand what you're trying ...

Hmmm, honestly, the topic has been explored quite a bit already, but I'm always open to variations. I have to agree that the repetition of 'Why, Why Why' ruins the ...

Ok, I know this sounds weird, but if I hear of a book thats really bad, sometimes I go out and buy it so I can take my red-pen to ...

This was hilarious! And I must say, I totally agree with you. For me personally, The Twilight books are kind of over-rated. In the tiniest way, it almost reminded me ...

I liked this, simple, not flogged down with too many words (I hate it when people do that). I really liked how there was no real rule to the rhyme ...

Ok, sure, The Inherintance series is popular and gets kids to read. I applaud that. And yes, I will probably read the last book, and yes, I will probably hate ...

Actually, I find what you did good strategy for starters. Write what you feel, like what you just did, pour it all out, don't worry about rhythm or whatnot. *Then* ...

It's a good poem, not fantastic, but hey, that doesn't mean you can't make it fantastic. You told here, didn't show, which is a no-no most of the time in ...

You know what this reminded me of? Nursery rhymes mom would read to me before bed and I would later memorize. And I think that's great. It's really cute and ...

Wow. That's a lot of metaphors. Usually, I'm not a fan of metaphor-loaded poems, but I really liked this. Except in some places it got a bit confusing, couldn't follow ...

I really liked this, simple, to the point, my favorite kind. However, sometimes your rhythm got thrown off, like when you said "Of your hatred it is full. " It ...

I really liked this, sweet and simple, which is my favorite kind, personally. I have to agree with ta-mara though, the first stanza was a bit, plain, lacking. there's the ...

First off, I thought this was really good. I liked the fire-love comparison, although you need to make it more clear that you are comparing fire to love, it could ...

I agree with Sugarbowl, you definitly put a lot into this chapter, although perhaps you could have revealed these details in an ealier chapter? I wasn't looking for mechanical errors ...

I thought it was really cute, I liked the theme of it, funny. But...but the rhyme scheme was going all over the place sometimes! First it rhymed, then it didn't, ...